tirsdag den 9. marts 2010

Captured by those eyes Sasori lemon

- “Why are you here again?” he asked lowly and you felt his hot breathe tickle the skin below your ear.
- “I’m going to keep an eye on your Kazekage and…and.. I wanted.. t-to see you as well” you said. Your cheeks felt like they was burning as you heard him chuckle.
“As well?” he asked teasingly. You didn’t know Sasori actually had a playful side so you were taken a little of guard there. And even more then you closed your eyes to think of an answer, and his lips softly gazed over yours.
- “I-I…. I missed you” you whispered, your eyes still closed. The sand ninja softly pressed his lips against yours, but only for short.
- “Really now?” he questioned, tracing his free hand up and down your one side slowly.
- “Yes” you whispered back and you felt his lips press against yours again, a little harder this time. The mere thought of his lips on yours made your legs feel like jelly, and the fact that they actually was, enough to make you excited for more and you didn’t hesitate to return it. A smirk formed on Sasori’s lips and you felt your arms wrap around his neck, as his made their way around your waist. His taste was a little odd, but good, his arms around you pressing you against his bare chest made your heart almost stop beating. You tried to move your one hand, but to your surprise he still had got you with his chakra strings.
- “Fight all you want, you’ll only weaken yourself” he muttered as he pulled away to kiss your cheekbone and down your jaw.
- “I-I’m not running away” you told him and closed your eyes. Sasori traced his lips around your neck and chuckled at your statement.
- “Is that so?” he asked teasingly and smirked as he hit your right spot, the one that made you inhale a slight sharp breath. He loosened his grip on you a little, but enough for you to entangle your left hand in his reddish locks and make the other rest on his chest. No one had ever been this close to you, so the feeling you felt building up inside your stomach felt strange, but great at the same time.
- “S-Sasori” you moaned softly as he sucked harder on your spot, leaving a huge purple hickey there. You found it a little unfair – you couldn’t move and he could. The red head smirked and on you, allowing you to move. Shyly you looked into his eyes and let your gaze slowly trailed over his well toned upper body.


Sasori smirked at your blushing face and started to undo your Konoha jounin uniform. Exposing your shirt you felt yourself being pushed backwards and fell onto his bed. You smirked shyly as you saw his facial expression turn into a frown as he looked at the thing that covered up your chest. He hovered over you and pressed his lips against yours as he reached behind your back, and unclasped your bra. Tossing it aside he began to massage your beast with his one hand, not gentle but yet not rough. By instinct you arched your back into him and let out a soft moan in the kiss, telling him that you liked what he was doing. Your one hand entangled itself in his reddish locks as the other slid up and down his chest, making him shudder slightly at your touch.
- “You seem pleased” he said huskily and trailed kissed down your neck, collarbone and in between the valley of your chest. You blushed at his statement and let out a soft moan as his other hand moved down your body and stroke your side lovingly. His hands felt a little cold against your skin, but you didn’t think further about it.
- “I k-kind of am” you shuddered lightly.
- “Only kind of?”, the puppet master asked you back smugly. You were about to turn your head away in embarrassment, but when you tried, your body didn’t move. Your head tilted up and your eyes met his. Staring into them, you felt yourself get lost in them as you had so many times earlier today. Sasori gazed his lips over yours and slid his other hand over your ninja pants. You wanted to arch, but couldn’t. Instead you let out another moan, and he kept rubbing softly against the fabric. Moving his fingers a little, you felt yourself arched into him.
- “S-Sasori.. please stop it” you whimpered with a hint excitement.
- “Impatient” he muttered and pulled your pants off along with your panties in one swift movement. If it wasn’t because you couldn’t move, you would have covered yourself up, but you were completely exposed to his view. Sasori sat himself up, making you look at him as he took of off his pants and boxers. You blushed scarlet red from the view, and your eyes sought for his yet again. He leaned down and kissed you on the lips as he positioned himself between your legs, that you voluntary spread for him. Or well, you were kind of forced to, but he wouldn’t hurt you – you could feel that, even thought he had you in control. Your arms wrapped around his neck, brining him closer as he gently pushed himself into your wet aroused area. You yelped from the pain and he began to move slowly enough for you to get adjusted to him. He broke the kiss and kissed the small tears that escaped your eyes away, then kissed your neck. As he did so he slowly fastened up the pace and it didn’t take long before the pain faded and turned into sheer pleasure. Your hands were moved to his shoulder, his hands on either side of your head keeping him off you.
- “P-Please Sasori… f-faster” you begged and moaned in his ear. He implied to it immediately and fastened his pace even more, going harder with each thrust. Your moans became louder and felt it was getting too much for you to handle, but a lot more when he groaned in your ear. You were coming closer to your climax, and you could tell that he was too. Suddenly you felt your body relax and you knew he was running out of chakra. You clenched yourself to him as the knot in your stomach unwind, sending you over the edge, moaning his name loudly. A few more hard thursts and he came as well, collapsing on top of you, breathing heavily.


With the last small amount of strength he had left, he pulled out of your warmth, making you groan softly. He rolled next to you and in the fear for some unwanted to come. You grabbed he cover and pulled over your bodies, before snuggling up close to him.
- “I need to tell you something, Benji” he said between the pants. You looked at him and kissed his cheek, happy to move your body freely again.
- “What?”, you asked. He put his arms around your waist and pulled you closer to him.
- “You’ll never see me like this again” he spoke calmly, making your heart almost stop.
- “W-Why not? I thought you might had… loved me” you said, feeling tears dwell in your eyes.
- “I do. I’m going to join the Akatsuki, I’m turning myself into a human puppet” he explained. You put your arms around him, hugging him closely.
- “Just promise me something” you said and looked at him. He looked down at you, meeting your eyes, waiting for you to go on.
- “Don’t get killed” you said almost in a whisper. Sasori chuckled and tilted your chin up and pecked you on the lips.
- “Do I look like someone who’s going to get killed?” he asked. You smiled a little and shook you head.
- “Good girl” he chuckled and kissed your lips one more time before falling asleep.

4 kommentarer:

  1. Okay, I have a few problems with this story; first of all, since this is before Sasori left, he would be approximately 15 years old, and I highly doubt anyone would want to read porn with minors, or reverse statutory rape. Secondly, if your OC is part of the ANBU Black Ops, is she around the same age? If so, many would agree with me that this is extremely Mary-Sue-ish, as all of the ANBU members are clearly in their mid 20's.

    However, if she is within this age group, then why are she and Sasori even in a relationship? Moreover, why would Suna need anyone from Konoha to guard the Kazekage when clearly those two villages were at war during that time period? And if I recall correctly, Chiyo has attempted to poison Shinobi from that village many times, only for Tsunade to cure it with an antidote of her own. Also, I highly doubt the former would take a liking to her grandson dating someone from the same village that was responsible for killing his parents.

    My third issue is, how do people run out Chakra during sex? I'm sorry, but I couldn't help but laugh at that or even take it seriously. It's not like they're using Jutsu or anything, so what gives? But more importantly: isn't Sasori's Stamina supposed to be really high, so why would he tire out so quickly?

    My last and probably biggest pet peeve of them all is, why in the name of Jashin would Sasori even tell ANYONE his intention of leaving and converting himself into a puppet? He always hid inside Hiruko for a reason: he didn't wish for people to know his secret; his true form which gave him eternal youth and immortality. Why do you think many people believed his puppet armor to be the real him? Rarely anyone has seen his real body outside of Hiruko.

    Also, your OC acting passive to such news is unrealistic at best. If Sasori was my boyfriend, took away my innocence, told me I was never going to see him as a human again, and later cut out on me, I'd be devastated, hurt, betrayed, used, among other things. Not, "It's AWWRITE that I won't be able to feel close to you anymore, and have a happy relationship together. Have fun in Akatsuki! And don't get killed, sweetie!". Seriously, it makes her seem like a one-dimensional cardboard-cut with no personality, depth, or REAL emotions.

    In short, next time you write another Sasori lemon, please do some proper research. It's getting utterly tedious reading through stories like this with him when all of them are almost exactly the same.

    SvarSlet
  2. I would agree with Reikookie but not everyone thinks of things like that as they write. I thought it was good. Of coarse it could use improvement but so can any story. May I also say Itachi was young when he was In ANBU. Although the whole leaving you thing and your OC being okay with it is pretty unrealistic. Just some helpful criticism. Keep it up though

    SvarSlet
  3. Yes Itachi was only 13 when he became an ANBU Captain, not just an ANBU member. So age has nothing to do with it. Plus this story was a request for a friend of theirs if you read the beginning of this story on quizilla.

    SvarSlet
  4. hey reikookie, SHUT THE FUCK UP!!! this is a fucking fanfic!!! fer all we care the autho coulda done anything to sasori so shut the fuck up!! yeah it didnt perfectly mmatch the actual story or watev but hey, THIS IS THERE STORY. lets see you make one ok? dont be a total bitch with a huge pipe shoved up there ass.
    any way i loved the lemon it could always be more discriptive but hell! urs is better then i could write! good job keep improving and writing.

    SvarSlet